Draft One Thoughts and Responses (Pica)

Draft One of Rudolph and Isadora is finally done, after about eight months. Although both Mars (formerly The Politick) and I are ecstatic to have a finished draft, there's quite a but or revising that still must be done. We'll keep you updated on the changes we make, and hopefully will continue to post newly added or updated segments from the story. For now, both Mars and I will post our thoughts about the first draft. Starting on Monday, will will take turns issuing each other writing challenges while we do our preliminary edits. We'll do our best to keep The Bookbird and the Wordgirl running even though we've finished our story - although in a way, we've only just begun.

The Good Parts

• I like our overall outline, although there are certainly parts that need fixing.
• I like the characters we have - I'd love to develop them deeper.
• Some parts are written really well, I want to keep and develop those.

The Less-Good Parts

• Lots of inconsistency - we have to go through and make sure all of our facts are straight.
• I kind of want to get rid of Taliss - other than the dragon, there is no other mention of magic. Unless, maybe we can make one of the characters magic users... I'm thinking Alisen, or maybe Lilia.
• I'd like to fill in a lot of the plot gaps - there needs to be more development in all of the character relations, and Quin and Alisen don't really have stated backstories.
• Um... Ros? That whole subplot doesn't make any sense to me.

What do you think of our first draft?